Avatar story, after Aang defended fire lord Ozai.

[kataang]

tenoko said:

The dialogue is a little much, but I love the details you put in. I must admit that I feel like you're pushing Kataang a bit over-the-top. It's still really sweet though, it's just a little too much. And why would Heibai be there? I hope I'm not being too critical, I do like the story, I just think some minor changes could make it more enjoyable. Sorry. :-\

I know what you mean with; Kataang over-the-top. After all, I'm a kataang supporter, but also for the zutarians I'll try to make a good, romantic zutara-scene.
You'll see.

[tenoko]

kataang said:

I know what you mean with; Kataang over-the-top. After all, I'm a kataang supporter, but also for the zutarians I'll try to make a good, romantic zutara-scene.
You'll see.

Oh no no no no no! Don't put in a Zutara scene! Unless this is meant to be Zutara, otherwise keep it Kataang! All I meant was that it feels like you're trying to force the Kataang in there to make it seem plausible. The best thing about Kataang is that they're best friends, they're as close as family. The only problem I had was that you didn't show that kind of closeness or connection, there were some (sorry to say) corny lines on Katara's end to show that there was Kataang. Keep to the Kataang, just tone it down a little, that's all. It still is a wonderful story though.

[kataang]

tenoko said:

kataang said:

I know what you mean with; Kataang over-the-top. After all, I'm a kataang supporter, but also for the zutarians I'll try to make a good, romantic zutara-scene.
You'll see.

Oh no no no no no! Don't put in a Zutara scene! Unless this is meant to be Zutara, otherwise keep it Kataang! All I meant was that it feels like you're trying to force the Kataang in there to make it seem plausible. The best thing about Kataang is that they're best friends, they're as close as family. The only problem I had was that you didn't show that kind of closeness or connection, there were some (sorry to say) corny lines on Katara's end to show that there was Kataang. Keep to the Kataang, just tone it down a little, that's all. It still is a wonderful story though.

I know what you mean;
This is more... 'the moulin-rouge end like thingy'.
I'll try!

[tenoko]

O.O! Moulin Rouge-ending.... but doesn't she DIE?! Wait... if you do that kind of ending you could totally have a love-triangle going! FINISH ALREADY!!!!!

[sakuraangelina]

Yeah Kataang,
Don't add in Zutara if that's not what you intended. I cannot write "Kataang" because I'm can't picture it in my head, so I allow people like you to write it for me ^^. So keep it up, the story is still good without Zutara.

[kataang]

Okey! Tomorrow new part, I promise!

[tenoko]

Waiting for the rest.... I'm intrigued, don't stop now!!!!

[kataang]

Sorry, but; I'm so busy! Much homework and stuff..

[DarkArchAngel]

Homework in your holidays..? o.o

[kataang]

yep, my mother is strict, she says: Go on and learn french..

[DarkArchAngel]

Eww French ;x Good luck!

[kataangaxk]

woah french? thats a hard language. Well Good luck.

[Lord Zuko]

Really loved the stories, not too bad of grammar. Keep up on the stories though. Good luck on the french and hurry to the story

[Luxord]

kataangaxk said:

woah french? thats a hard language. Well Good luck.

Well french Isn't that hard if you know spanish.
Spanish and French are almost brothers.
Why? Because some french words sound or are spelled
like the spnaish word.

[xxtophfanxx]

keep adding this is such a good scene.