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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 19, 2008 23:41:46 GMT 1
well, i've decided to create a bunch of drabbles. does anyone think this is a good idea? if you say Yay i'll start, but if it's nay i'll delete this whole idea. wadyasay?
here's the first one for a taste and keep in mind, i will not stay on one charecter idea or pairing.
3. Sarcasm
I looked at her from across the table. She was so sure of herself taking what she wanted then making snide comments. Actually that’s practically all she does. Sarcasm. So I decided I was going to be sarcastic back. She walked across from me. “hi blindy” I said only to see her put her foot down roughly and send me 50 feet into the air. She turned around. “What did you just call me?” She asked, “I was just refering to your eyes. Your starless eyes” I said inocently “ohh sokka you have a lot to learn” she said to me after I was successfully encased in a earth box. “so much.”
okay so maybe you didn't like that one i will post another one for you to sample. be warned this one is a bit more serious. (and i want you to know i am a kataang fan, i was just depressed.)
So long
“So I guess this is good bye huh” Katara asked, suddenly to Aang. “yeah I guess it is.” he said, getting ready to persue his path of life. “so long Aang” she said walking with her new husband to be to his battle ship. “So long Katara. I hope you and Zuko have a great life.”
poor aang. well don't forget to say yay or nay or even hi.
oh beter yet critisize my work that's always fun. see ya. (or not)
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Post by Teяa253 on Feb 20, 2008 0:56:46 GMT 1
it's short. That's the only thing I see wrong with it. Of course, I have no clue what drabbles are, so if they're supposed to be short, then good. BTW, does everyone write fanfics from a 1st-person view?
~Katara~
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Post by Orophin on Feb 20, 2008 0:58:08 GMT 1
Because the characters are so cool, you want to be them.
I could get all Phsychology 101 one you, but I won't.
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 20, 2008 3:06:39 GMT 1
so that is two YAY's?
And yes Drabbles are suppost to be short. they are baicaly one scene fan fics.
and don't forget to give me idea's. i'll do a drabble about anything (in avatar that is)
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 20, 2008 3:29:26 GMT 1
Heres another one. i'm not to happy with it but, it gets the point out.
does anyone notice?
Sokka: “It’s so dark down here, I can’t see a thing!” Toph: “oh what a nightmare” Sokka: “oh, sorry.” ******* Katara: Been doing any scams lately?” Toph: No Katara: then what is this? **paper ruffles** Toph:**yelling** I don’t know what is it with you people I’m blind! ******* Does anyone notice that I’m blind? Do I need to be weak and helpless for them to care? Sometimes I wish I could see. Katara: Toph look at your self do you have any idea how dirty you are? And other times it’s just fine being blind.
Poor toph. does anyone have a memory span for longer then 5 minutes?
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Post by Dogg450 on Feb 20, 2008 7:51:11 GMT 1
I didn't like the last one very much. On the top {I guess I'm kataang} Is that right?
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 20, 2008 14:36:00 GMT 1
I didn't like it either but i have to give a variety.
he who pleases everyone pleases no one.
-peace-
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 20, 2008 14:45:38 GMT 1
Okay this one is sorta random. That's okay because i am usualy a random person.....so enjoy Push ups
push-ups
“hey snoozes.” toph said. “what” I asked. “I bet you couldn’t beat me or and Aang in a round of push-ups.” she said “Where did this come from?” I asked. “I just want something else to rub in everyone’s face.” she finished. “What if I lose?” I asked. “whoever loses has to lick Appa” Aang said. “okay I’m in.” I said, thinking of Aang or toph licking Appa. It would be cool to watch. “on your mark get set go.” toph yelled after we had gotten into position. Katara eventually came back to see us all on the ground doing pushups. “what are you guy doing?” she wondered aloud. “pushup contest.” I stated simply. Two hours later. “aren’t you getting tiered?” she asked us. To tell you the truth I was getting pretty tiered. Toph was doing it with the same one hand she started out with and Aang was blank. “no” all of us answered together. An hour later. “it’s getting dark and you’ve been at this for 3 hours. Maybe you should stop.” she said. “no.” We simply said. 1 hour later. I fell over. “ha I knew you’d lose.” toph said coming over to me. “so I have lick appa?” I asked. “yep" was all she said. I learned two things that day, Never challenge Toph to a push-up contest and Appa most certainly does not taste like marshmelows.
Wow, Toph sure is impulsive. Poor sokka he always loses. Sorta funny to see him lick appa though.
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 21, 2008 0:50:43 GMT 1
i guess ya'al didn't like that one to much did ya? well maybe this one will float your Boat.
2. Dying wish
“Aang, Aang don’t leave me.” I said tears streaming from my eyes. We had just taken down the firlord. Unfortunately Aang was dying. “Katara,” he said almost inaudibly. “what is it Aang,” I said, unable to steady myself. “remember me, even when i don't remember you, Remember me” he said then died in my arms. “I will,” I said to his body, “I will always remember you” i wrote this one a while ago and it's pretty depressing
tell me what you thought.
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Post by Teяa253 on Feb 21, 2008 1:00:13 GMT 1
they're not bad... BTW, I noticed that the Toph blind jokes were from the show. Toph's blind jokes are the finniest recurring joke they have--funnier than Sokka. Toph: WHY? you think I can't pout up a poster!?! *Toph grabs the glue and slams a poster on the wall backwards* Toph: *sighs* it's upside-down, isn't it?
that's not even my favorite one though
~Toph~
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 21, 2008 3:08:18 GMT 1
well what can i do to make them beter?
and yes Toph's Blind jokes are the best. i used the ones from the show to make a piont.
don't froget to comment and give me ideas.
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 21, 2008 14:32:21 GMT 1
well here's one i wrote wheni was hyper. hope you enjoy.
Desert
“Time for desert!” I yelled out. “now heres what we have.” I started “We have sea slugs, air moths, lemur monkeys, Appa, wood, rocks, fire, and our special,” I took a long dramtic pause as everyone looked at me like I was crazy, “Mantis ants.” “Sokka that’s not funny” Katara stated. “How could you make a joke about Appa like that?” Aang asked. “HMMMMMMMMMMMM choices, choices.” Iroh said thoughtfully.
........that's not as funny as it was then. oh well it's Mindless Madness.
(including flames) coment, give idea's.
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Post by xxtophfanxx on Feb 23, 2008 0:45:34 GMT 1
Okay so i get that ya'al aren't liking my short drabbles to much so here's a long one consisting of a Toph/Katara friendship. enjoy
That one moment when excitment was welling inside of me, when we had struck the firelord with the mighty power of the avatar(and the best earth bender in the world of course) and fallen had happened about a month ago and now i am bored. who would have thought. we are in Ba-sin-sa now and i gotta hand it to them, they are more boring now then they were befor the end, more boring then katara giving a motherly speach, more boring then 'watching' the sunset. Katara: toph, come with me, we are going to the store Me: No way sugar queen Katara: oh come on, it'll be fun *she sang* ME:That most certainly is not what i call 'fun' besides why not let sokka and Aang go? Katara: Actualy that doesn't sound like such a bad idea *turns to aang and sokka* you guys go shop for the.......well the everything. Sokka: Alright fine. Aang: Yeah sure *glairs at me* Me: *sends rock from the floor* Aang: *gets hit by rock* ouch Me: ha ha *pionts at him* Sokka and Aang: *Leave* well no the exciting part of the day has passed and i have become bored again. Katara: Why don't we have a girls day out? Me: No Katara: okay, i have an idea, we could fight and whoever wins gets to chose what we do. Me: okay i guess this will be easy, i can beat her anytime, especialy since we got the rock floors. Katara: okay go Katara and i begin to fight. she is moving backwards like she is on the defence. Well i won't go into specifics but all in all she cheated. we do have one room that has wooden flooring. she brought me into it and i couldn't see. she tackled me and pinned my shoulders. Me: no fair you cheated Katara: i won, so let's go. Me: fine we went through a series of turns until we got to a place i hadn't fealt before. we went inside. i heard screems, but they wern't bad screams they were fan screams, Anouncer: and here we have the Runaway! that was me. Katara: go get em Alright maybe days out couldn't be that bad.
wow i feel great. i know it sux but oh well. there you go.
don't forget to reply and give idea's.
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Post by Ilovethisshow on Feb 24, 2008 5:25:44 GMT 1
hi, well that wasn't the greatest one i've seen, but nice ending. you need to work on detail a little more.
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Post by Teяa253 on Feb 24, 2008 5:31:01 GMT 1
hmmm... other than blind jokes, I'm not too sure. Then again, I make up all kinds of blind jokes, because Sanaki, my RPG character who also appears in my series "Avatar Fight Club" is blind.
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