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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 3, 2008 6:09:53 GMT 1
it is...
I mean, at first I didn't think I could pull it off, and yet when I tried, everything just sorta fell into place.
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 3, 2008 6:14:42 GMT 1
like everything else
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 3, 2008 6:32:06 GMT 1
exactly.
I love this story, because it really does on so many occasions write itself.
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 4, 2008 0:14:54 GMT 1
because you set it up really well
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 4, 2008 0:25:26 GMT 1
yeah...
incidentally, while I was writing chapter 35, Alzar decided that she didn't want me to write what I was originally gonna write, so she made a scene, and that chapter sort of turned bad...
(bad for some of the characters... I actually liked that chapter)
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 4, 2008 1:14:26 GMT 1
I love that chapter
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 4, 2008 1:26:15 GMT 1
so did I...
I liked 32, 33, 34, and 35 a lot...
I might expand on that Alzar/Ryuka fight a bit though, that was interesting to write about...
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 4, 2008 1:57:39 GMT 1
the cutting the feet open thing really seemed explicit. But that's just me.
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 4, 2008 2:15:12 GMT 1
it kinda was...
I mean, I can't leave all the graphic stuff out... it's kinda like a 'taste'
I mean, if it were explicit to my standards, I'd just use a different choice of words...
instead of "with one fell stroke he had swiped a knife across the soles of Alzar’s feet", I'd probably say something like:
"with one fell stroke Ryuka had slashes the soles of Alzar's feet, the swiftness and sharpness of the blade easily tearing through Alzar's flesh..."
there's the difference.
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 4, 2008 2:22:20 GMT 1
oh yeah, big difference. that second one was almost evil
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 4, 2008 2:28:09 GMT 1
exactly.
that's the sort of difference the explicit version will contain (once I write it)
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 4, 2008 2:32:39 GMT 1
okay, so forget anything I'd said
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 4, 2008 2:37:35 GMT 1
no, you were right about it being slightly graphic/explicit...
it's just there's a more explicit version...
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Post by Zukoisabeast on Dec 4, 2008 2:42:19 GMT 1
I might not be able to take it........wait nevermind, I'm over it
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Post by Teяa253 on Dec 4, 2008 2:58:13 GMT 1
lol okie.
but yeah, sometimes my "Explicit" version is moer of an extension with some graphicness pitched in.
this fight will liklely be that way.
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